thursday.

[sunfright]

in the folds of my dress
I am hiding four girls
each reaching for
her corner of the world

the more they reach
the more I stretch
to accommodate
I wonder what happens
when one day
my fabric tears
at the seams

and my birdlike soul
like an eiderdown duvet
explodes
in a rain
of feathers

Comments

[ex_flameandsong751]

That's beautiful. Did you write that?

[sunfright]

I did! Kind of exploring a bird theme these days.

[ex_flameandsong751]

I really liked that.

[sunfright]

Thank you so much! I'm so glad. Can I ask if there's anything specific you liked about it? I'm still trying to figure out how to work poetry in English, so knowing what people like helps.

[ex_flameandsong751]

The melancholy and that feeling of emotional intensity, which is something I related to. The imagery of it was powerful.

It is especially impressive knowing that English isn't your first language and you still managed to write something that beautiful in English.

[sunfright]

I have a specific style in Danish, when I write, and I am trying to recapture it in English which is hard because the rhythm of the language is very different and the vocabulary so much... bigger. I'm learning as I go.

Thank you so much! Emotional intensity is exactly what I'm always going for when I write poetry, so that makes me happy.

[earthspirits]

Lovely, lovely poem.

[sunfright]

Thank you so much!